Talking More of Comeback Kid

An Inspirational Tale for Millennials

While Lord of Columbia, the first book being released in September, is in its final edits, my inspirational tale, Comeback Kid, is getting a nice makeover, as I described in my last article. So, for a brief elevator pitch, Comeback Kid is a down-on-his-luck twenty-seven-year-old watching both those his age and the younger crowd continually pass him in terms of success.

Yes, Brock Patrick (my protagonist) is in for a rough treat in Comeback Kid. But, as the title implies, (spoiler alert!) Comeback Kid is going to be a wild, inspirational ride to the very last word.

While Lord of Columbia focuses on adult themes (despite being a contemporary fantasy), Comeback Kid can be read by anyone feeling down on themselves and need a boost to take the world by storm in, as My Freedom Flame preaches, pursuing passion.

Like Lord of Columbia, Comeback Kid will be a trilogy, and I guess might loosely intertwine with its cousin series.




My background on Comeback Kid goes back to 2015 when I needed a break from Lord of Columbia. As stated in my previous article, I knew how to create a few catchy tales but had not the slightest idea how to write, (thank you, Jerry Jenkins!).

Thankfully, I never actually released Comeback Kid to anyone but those on my original blog, and if you come across it, you may as well pitch it, because the book is completely different and much better written.


My Mistakes!

So, what were some mistakes I made on Comeback Kid (and Lord of Columbia)?

1) Info dumping. Wow, one of the first things I learned from Jerry Jenkins was making such a big mistake info dumping the reader. But, background is necessary, right? So, I thought, but I also remember putting a book away in library class back in grade school (and middle school) if the author didn’t get to the action within the first few pages. So, why would I read my own work? I thought it was in the rules.

2) I showed tons of authorship. All the ‘he said,’ ‘she said’ can go to the amateurs. Describing every detail of every scene would make a reader’s head explode. Oh, so on the nose!

3) Okay, the reader TOTALLY lost focus here! Yeah, so I’m in Brock’s head, then his father’s, then his brothers, back to Brock’s, then Brock’s nemesis, and the whole nine yards in the same scene. Look, one of the most important things I’ve learned is this: Pick a character (usually the main), get into their heads, become them, and do in the story what they would do if you were actually them.

4) Keep on telling! It was cold. Brock was upset. His father was mad. Everything was bad, bad, bad! Yeah, I just fell asleep, too. But…all of these little phrases can be shown. Brock shivered as he lit a cigarette. Brock reclined in his broken-down Chevy. Is his life ever going to gain some traction? His father stormed from the room and slammed the door.



My Points

Okay, so I hope you see some of my points on why Comeback Kid, my original trilogy, needed a complete overhaul. However, I decided to use Lord of Columbia as the long-cut guinea pig because I found the story more interesting to issues facing our freedom.


Comeback Kid is more on the micro-level which will benefit millennials, but Lord of Columbia is much, much more complex.

Being a kinesthetic learner, I knew if I mastered Lord of Columbia’s sheer complexity, anything would be easy. It’s like driving through New York City for the first time. Once you do it, any city after New York will be a cakewalk. Well, ditto for Pittsburgh, and if you’ve ever driven through it, you’ll know what I mean.

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